Comments on: Story #20: Bridge http://www.longstraighthighway.com/2009/12/02/story-20-bridge/ amusements for gentlemen and scholars Thu, 19 Jan 2012 19:59:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: leafmuncher http://www.longstraighthighway.com/2009/12/02/story-20-bridge/comment-page-1/#comment-2342 leafmuncher Thu, 03 Dec 2009 12:50:41 +0000 http://www.longstraighthighway.com/?p=1527#comment-2342 Liked: I really liked this one. The tone, the rhythm, the dialog, all really great. I think my favorite part was his relationship with the girl and the whole Wisconsin thing. Really nice done. I even read it again to Anna out loud and it confirmed the great flow.<br><br>Disliked: If I had to pick on something, maybe the whole digression about his job and the merger was a bit flow-breaking. Liked: I really liked this one. The tone, the rhythm, the dialog, all really great. I think my favorite part was his relationship with the girl and the whole Wisconsin thing. Really nice done. I even read it again to Anna out loud and it confirmed the great flow.

Disliked: If I had to pick on something, maybe the whole digression about his job and the merger was a bit flow-breaking.

]]> By: leafmuncher http://www.longstraighthighway.com/2009/12/02/story-20-bridge/comment-page-1/#comment-2081 leafmuncher Thu, 03 Dec 2009 04:50:41 +0000 http://www.longstraighthighway.com/?p=1527#comment-2081 Liked: I really liked this one. The tone, the rhythm, the dialog, all really great. I think my favorite part was his relationship with the girl and the whole Wisconsin thing. Really nice done. I even read it again to Anna out loud and it confirmed the great flow.<br><br>Disliked: If I had to pick on something, maybe the whole digression about his job and the merger was a bit flow-breaking. Liked: I really liked this one. The tone, the rhythm, the dialog, all really great. I think my favorite part was his relationship with the girl and the whole Wisconsin thing. Really nice done. I even read it again to Anna out loud and it confirmed the great flow.

Disliked: If I had to pick on something, maybe the whole digression about his job and the merger was a bit flow-breaking.

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